Slice 12 of 31
I was looking through my coaching notebook from summer last year and found the I am formula poem...wrote it about slicing...all that I am and want to be...
I Am
I am me, Amy, wife, mom, teacher, coach...and a writer?!
I wonder if I can really write and slice everyday…
I hear twinkling music, snoring, coughing, crying…
I see streetlights, headlights, nightlights, desk lights
I want a quiet moment with the keys and the screen
I am me, Amy, wife, mom, teacher, coach and a writer?
I pretend I am listening really thinking-but my mind is drifting…about my next slice
I feel a shiver, a shudder, a quiver-wondering if I can be free
I touch the keys to break free from distractions
I worry that I’m not spending time when it matters
I cry when I realize nothing stays the same
I am me, Amy, wife, mom, teacher, coach and a writer.
I understand why nothing stays the same.
I say that change is a good thing.
I dream that change can happen and be positive
I try to reflect on the outcome of change
I hope that reflection can lead to growth.
I am me, Amy, wife, mom, teacher, coach and a writer!
What a great use of the "I am" poem! I think I'll tuck this away to use with my students at the end of the year. I really love how your questions turn in to exclamations by the end of the poem.
ReplyDelete"I pretend I am listening really thinking-but my mind is drifting…about my next slice"
ReplyDeleteHa! Isn't that the truth this March month of the slicing challenge!
Yes, slice searchers indeed!
DeleteLove this! The punctuation change is so telling. You are a writer! When I go back and reread I see so many specific craft moves throughout. This is a great piece as a mentor text.
ReplyDeleteThanks LC! I just felt like the punctuation was part of telling the story-even though they aren't words they definitely influenced what I meant to say...
DeleteYou add dimension and layers with your poem.
ReplyDeleteI just tried a poem today...I'll maybe post it tomorrow. For some reason poetry always freaks me out. If I try a formula, like yours it might give me more confidence. I loved quiver-wondering.
ReplyDeleteYour comment makes me think about how kids feel when we try and get them to write poetry.
DeletePowerful! I love the repeating line of you and the added writer?. Yes, you are a writer of the moment, of hopes, and of your thinking.
ReplyDeleteThis is one of my favorite poem styles to use with kids. You wrote a really great one--and I like the change of punctuation at the end. You are a writer!
ReplyDeleteHave you used the George Ella Lyon poem "Where I'm From" It's another great poem to use with kids and on her web site there is a template and a lesson plan! (and it will give you another slice on a day you can't think of anything to write about!)
I have not used the George Ella Lyon poem-I do remember the story "Together". I will look it up!
DeleteThanks for the suggestion!
Amy, that was delightful! I noticed the subtle punctuation changes. Yes, you are a writer.
ReplyDeleteI guess this one would be a keeper in the writers notebook...I really should start keeping one. Do you keep one?
DeleteAn I am poem, with a shifting voice! I love it! You are a writer, indeed!
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